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NaruHina Secret Lovers: Ch 3 by Kyoshi-M NaruHina Secret Lovers: Ch 3 by Kyoshi-M

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Finally! the long awaited 3rd chapter of Secret Lovers is finally done. It was quite a challenge to out-do the earlier chapters, and find inspiration for it to stay lovey dovey as it should be :iconicameplz:
For people who don't quite understand my little jokes and the such in the story.
- The part where Hinata finishes her ramen before Naruto is a reference to one of the Omake endings(sorry that the video subs are in spanish) where Hinata wins a ramen eating contest haha.
- Unless it wasn't obvious, Ayame is protecting Naruto and Hinata from being embarassed by Teuchi...and Naruto is too dense to realize that he noticed that they're on a date haha
- "juho soshiken" is the name of Hinata's jutsu, it means "gentle step: twin lion fists", what Naruto said was "gentle step: twin tiger fists" or "juho sotoraken"
- For anyone who doesn't remember, in the anime Hinata looked at Naruto as he was sulking during the graduation day at the Academy. I tend to disregard the anime completely, except for this because Hinata hadn't been introduced in the manga when this happened, but I have a feeling she would've been watching either way.


In any case, the whole idea for this chapter was "awkward first date". Because let's face it guys, Naruto and Hinata are newbies at dating. It's also very much based off my own romantic experiences (as i have stated before). And well I have always liked shy girls, that's why I chose to let Hinata join in a little with the teasing and whatnot. And Naruto seems out of character because he is being more open about how he feels with her. If any of you recall he had a nice conversation with her when he was nervous about facing Neji in the chuunin exams. Their relationship is much more intimate in the official story, so I took from that and made them be more open with each other during their date...despite them still being unbelievably nervous haha.

And I can just see it now, I can see some people complaining that Hinata didn't faint and that Naruto is being too shy. 2 things:

1. Naruto IS very outspoken BUT he's not very open about his inner-most feelings, being in a more intimate relationship (Even if its a new found relationship) would make Naruto show his insecurity with Hinata. I speak from experience, that's how it went for me in real life
2. Hinata doesn't faint as much as people think she does, if I recall correctly she's fainted like 3 times, and only one was during shippuden. She's not insane guys, just cute and shy.


Chapter 1 (PDF version)
Chapter 2 (PDF version)
Chapter 3: ---

The preview image was used with permission of talent incarnated; :iconannria2002: (Original deviation)
go check out her gallery, her skills are just...:iconmegustaplz:


Naruto and Hinata and any other Naruto characters belong to Masashi Kishimoto (c)
Story belongs to me (c)

I would like to point out that this girl here :iconmini-misty224: is my editor, she is responsible for quality control of this story, and she has written and re-written many parts and dialogues of this story. Without her, Secret Lovers would NOT be what it is. give her much love
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daga000 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WOW... like wow
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KillerBee27 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014
When is the next chapter coming? This story is fantastic!
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daga000 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't get it. How I'm supposed to read this?
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student Digital Artist
it's a PDF, your browser should just open it. You may encounter some problems if you're using Safari or Internet explorer, and I'm not quite sure how well it reads if you're on mobile. Try opening it with chrome or firefox! that should do the trick my friend :)

If you have any more issues do let me know ok?
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daga000 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I guess it won't work on mobile
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Number1HinataFan2 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Right under the favorites button, there is a download button. Press that on your mobile and you can read it ^^
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socorro333 Featured By Owner May 30, 2014
omg i keep falling in love with your story with each new chapter! i absolutely love how detailed and realistic you make it! please please please say you're going to continue!! :iconawwwplz:
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I am I really am, I haven't written much of the 4th chapter in a long time and I'm really sorry with everyone waiting for a next chapter, I try to be constant with it but well college gets in the way haha. Like I said, there is already a chapter 4 and a layout for chapter 5, I just haven't written much of them in a while sorry :P

AND AS A MESSAGE TO EVERYONE WHO LIKES THIS STORY, I AM CONTINUING IT, IT IS MOSTLY WRITTEN BUT WIDELY UNEDITED SO SORRY FOR SO MUCH DELAY
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socorro333 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014
Yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :icon34nipahplz:
hehe. omg im so happy you're continuing!! 
and omg no worries,i  absolutely get it. college totally drains all your time!!! it's all the papers, exams and work you have to do. >w<
so yep yep, take your time and make sure to get all your school work done! that's the most important! I will be here waiting for your next chapter! yay~!!! :)
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daily-happiness Featured By Owner May 4, 2014
I just love this story <3 I hope that you'll write more :D
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2014  Student Digital Artist
yes yes i will, i've just had to deal with college a lot and well i'm moving soon to canada as well, i have had a bit of issue trying to write wortwhile material for the fanfic, but like i answered another comment, the 4th chapter is in the works and 5th chapter is already layed out, i'm actually planning to write atleast 10 chapters so don't worry ok?
thank you for enjoying my work!
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daily-happiness Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014
oh, such a good news!!!  You write so realistic - especially I love similarities of personality of characters to their behaviors in your story <3 I will be waiting ^^
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kitsunescythe Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You mentioned disregarding the anime. You know Kishimoto oversees what happens in the anime, right? So it's still pretty much canon.
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Student Digital Artist
actually kishimoto has barely any time to oversee the anime, i mean sure he oversees design or general story construction, but the anime adds a lot of unnecessary details just to fill a 20 min episode. All that filler content is not canon
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kitsunescythe Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
He may not be consulted on every tiny filler detail, but he is consulted on the ones that have anything to do with his plans for the story. Such as the flashback Hinata has when she saves him from Pain of Naruto saving her from bullies when they were little. NaruHina and other things like that, he is consulted on.
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Varia31 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The way this is written is fairly convincing. I like it! Are you still planning to make more chapters, by any chance?
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Sorry I took so long to answer, winter break is a very busy time for me. 
Yes I am planning to write more, I kinda just lost my inspiration for a rather long time, chapter 4 has only the intro written! D:
The story is all planned out, it does have a conclusion rest assured u.u

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Varia31 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ah, excellent! Well, take your time. I look forward to your next chapter! :)
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JecOlantern Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
T_T aw man. Google is being an arse to me. I cant read this chapter.
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AJNZulu Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013
Yup. Want the next one!!!! Fav!
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FrenchPhilosopher Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
Hey this is cute.
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Ioane808 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
... KISS HERE ALREADY!!!
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Ioane808 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
*her
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Andigatron Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
It's a great Story so far!
Keep up the good work!
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Italian-diver91 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
Loved all of the chapters! Plz continue the story!
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storm008 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
I love the story am a big NaruHina fan
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levymcgarden17 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013   Artist
Man i can't wait till the next chapter
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lonelysoul10 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Cute...
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NaruHina-Sammie Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
simply amazing! Greeting better every time! xD can't wait for the next chapter! :D
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Thank you for your support! i am doing my very best to make chapter 4 the best chapter so far!
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Miss-Nyappy Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ahh, I just got captivated by your story. I really like the first-person writing style you're using, I could imagine everything!
I hope you will release a new chapter soon! : DDD
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Digital Artist
thank you very much! :D
I wish to release the new chapter sometime next month.
:iconarigatouplz:
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Miss-Nyappy Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
May your wish come true! :D
Keep up the great work ^.^
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johnny13r Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
i absolutely loved this and i cannot wait for the next chapter
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student Digital Artist
thank you SO much for all the faves! from one day to another i got 26 new feedback messages!
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johnny13r Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
you're welcome
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hodges22 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
whens the next one?
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I am hoping to release the new chapter very VERY soon!
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hodges22 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay! im so excited :la: thankyou :worship:
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Magic-Waffles Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student General Artist
NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! THAT'S IT!?!?!?! YOU CAN'T JUST MAKE AN AWESOME STORY LIKE THIS AND ONLY MAKE 3 CHAPTERS!!!!!!! WHY KIOSHI-SAMMA?!?!? WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY?!?!?!? >.<
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Digital Artist
あれ?。。。
清志様ですか。。。
wwwww
well...that's the first time someone has called me sama...
lol anywho, thank you very much for your appreciation and enthusiasm. There aren't just 3 chapters, as a matter of fact I have planned to write AT LEAST 10 chapters of Secret Lovers.
BUT I lost inspiration to write lately, so I haven't been able to write anything :iconcryforeverplz:
ON TOP of that I also have been heavily overworked at college this semester, so I haven't written anything! D:
I'll soon resume writing chapter 4 to be delivered within the next weeks hopefully

Thank you for your kind words :iconarigatouplz:
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Magic-Waffles Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student General Artist
私はあなた様を呼び出した場合、それは大丈夫ですか?私はあなたの仕事を賞賛し、私は接尾辞が適切であったと思ったので、私はあなたを尊敬しています。
あなたがいずれかのインスピレーションを見つけることができませんごめんなさい:(それが起こるとき、それは吸う、私は英語を話すが、私はそれが日本人でこれを書くことがクールだと思ったので、今年は日本語を話す方法を学んでいる私はしませんでした本当にそれは思った書き込み^^;(Google翻訳)私はこの長い間、私はまだ学んでいるひらがなを気にいらない書き込みが、私もそれらのすべてを暗記していないことができるというの近くにないんだけどだからyaの大ファン。!:D
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Digital Artist
wwww
これでいいです
お前の言葉は一寸変なです
でも俺はわかりました
度もありがとうございます対してお前のネン懇命
俺が日本語と英語とスペイン語
がんばるよ
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Jaqulen Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
MAKE ANOTHER ONE PLZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I WILL! I JUST NEED SOME INSPIRATION! WHAT WOULD YOU LIKE IN THE STORY?!
THANK YOU FOR YOUR SUPPORT!
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Jaqulen Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I WOULD LIKE IT IF THE WENT ON A MISSION, HAVE SOME ROMANTIC PARTS (u no what i mean), FIGHTING MORE PEOPLE, AND A LOT OF TOUCHING AND HUGGING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :iconmonkeyloveplz: :iconmonkeyloveplz: :iconmonkeyloveplz: :iconmonkeyloveplz: :iconmonkeyloveplz: :iconmonkeyloveplz: :iconmonkeyloveplz:
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Student Digital Artist
BUT WHAT ABOUT THE WAR THOUGH? LIKE...WHAT?
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Jaqulen Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
HMMMM....... MAYBE ADD A PIT OF AKASKI HERE AND THERE..... MAYBE PEI TOO...... JUST A SUGGESTION..... TOATS YOUR OPPS THOUGH!!!!!!!
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moonwateralpha101 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
WOW...this is just...wow! I have my own naruhina story im sort of working on but im deciding whether to publish it or not? Could ya help me out?
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Kyoshi-M Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
My best advice is; just go for it. The internet may be the harshest teacher, but you will learn by leaps and bounds. Don't be shy, throw your stuff at the world, you might just have the best naruhina story in your head and you're depriving the world of it! :D
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